Hello guys, I am here with another blog post and I am very excited to show this to you! My task was to be creative with my writing, when I go to write. So I took a picture and wrote a story that I made up about the picture. I really like how it started off sad and because great. anyways, here is my writing and i hope you like it, BYE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Kia ora Sophia,
ReplyDeleteWhat a really cool image to write a story about. I like that you explained how you are practising your creative writing skills. I thought your story was creative.
I agree, the sad beginning was an interesting way to start it. I was especially impressed with your use of adjectives in the sentence that described the wall the man found. I thought things got lighter and brighter when he went through the wall, which shows the good choices of words you used.
Something that could make your writing even more interesting would be to change the start of some of your sentences. Rather than 'he', you could use an 'ing' word instead. For example: instead of 'He cried himself to sleep ... ' you could use 'Crying to himself, he fell into a restless sleep'. Just an idea for you to think about.
Keep up the great writing,
:) Sharon - Te Ara Tūhura Education Programme Leader
Hellosta Phia
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I Really Like The Image You Picked For This It Makes Me Happy In A Kinda Way Yeah I Don't Know What Language I Am Talking Either But Yeah Um Wait What Oh Yeah Okay So Your Story Is Amazing And I Love The Way You You Did It.
Tayla :D