The Present

W.A.L.T:  Write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
• Seeks feedback and makes changes to texts to improve clarity and meaning.

In Ako Ngatahi we had to write a narrative about a video. It was about a boy opening a present that was a dog with three legs. Here is the video of the present. I hope you enjoy my story.

The Present

The Present

One day I was playing my video game. Then one minute later mum came in and I was annoyed. That’s because she keeps on making me clean but since I clean a lot she had a present in her arms. She put it on the table right in front of me. Then when the blinds were down and mum put them up and I couldn’t really see my game properly. It was confusing. Mum said to me that I could open the present because she bought it for me. I was surprised because it was a long time since she got me a present. When I opened it, it was a dog. Then when I looked at it I was like, wow cool. As soon as I picked it up I noticed that it has only three legs. I felt mad and disgusted because mum gave my a three legged dog. So I knocked over the box that the dog was in. It kept on jumping on my leg so I kicked it. I saw it curling up in the carpet. Then it saw a ball. It ran to it and it was so stupid that it banged itself into the drawer because the ball was under the drawer.  It was playing silly with the ball because of it’s disabled leg and I knew how he felt because my leg was disabled as well. So I got up and picked up my crutches and got the ball then went out to play with my dog. We played catch and we did tricks. It was so fun. And I was so glad that I have someone to play with at home.